And it’s just... very anal. The character is very superficial. He believes that anything he thinks or wants at the time should happen. He goes to Minnesota or whatever to visit this girl... And then he wants to make out, and she doesn’t want to, but he doesn’t care. He’s so superficial that he doesn’t even realize that the other person doesn’t enjoy him at all.
It’s too busy. And disconnected and rambling. It shouldn’t be published."
These are pretty fun reviews, and very astute. I especially like her thoughts on Bechdel's Fun Home.